Sentence starters for persuasive writing

                                            Breaks should be longer at school.

I'm absolutely certain that breaks should be longer so people have more time to play and hang out with their friends and so people can eat also finish there diet but people don't always want longer time to play because sometimes they get bored or they just don't want to play longer.

I’m absolutely certain that breaks should not be compulsory in school because heaps of people play to much and then teachers have all this work for you to do and the bell rings thats why i think that longer breaks should not be compulsory and because people will only want to play not learn at all that’s my reason.

Fidget spinners should/shouldn't be allowed in class.

I definitely disagree that fidget spinners should be compulsory so students can learn instead of focusing on the fidget spinners it makes people fidget with it because it says it straight in the title and it also causes distraction towards other people and will make everyone get it and our teacher will be mad cause of all the hard work and effort she put into it because everyone won't listen that's why i think fidget spinners should not be compulsory in school and in other classes. what will happen with the fidget spinner. 





Fidget spinner should be allowed in class

Most people would agree that fidget spinners can/might be allowed in class when kids are bored they can play with it even when you have to play hand games you can play with it rather than just going on your netbook cause you will yell at your friends and go like share the game with me and all that kind of stuff that's why i think fidget spinners should be compulsory in class and people like getting entertained so fidget spinners will be the best thing to entertain the person what will you child do with the fidget spinner.

I hope you guys understand our reasoning i hope you people will not/will let it be compulsory so that you

WALT how to use dialogue in our writing

Focuses for writing this week
Explanation in my own words.
How to use speech marks
Before and after the talking
How to put in other punctuation
They go before the speech markA
When to start a new line or when to keep writing
2 or more people are talking
Different words for ‘said’
Asked, replied, responded, yelled, screamed, shouted, mumbled, said, muttered, gasped, panting, chuckled, thought, told, uttered, continued, whispered
Adding adverbs
Responded politely,screamed angrily
EXAMPLES
“Who can I pick on?” asked Miss Ashley.
“Me” replied Timote.

“How was your day?” asked Hope.
“Great, thank you” replied Miss Ashley.

“How was your weekend” asked Dwyane.
“It was good” responded Havea.

If more than one person is talking, you put the reply underneath.
Mary was a beautiful girl who was wearing her long black hair in two plaits. She asked her mum, “can I go to the pools today?”.
“Why do you want to go” mum replied.
“It’s hot and I want to cool off”.
“Fine then”

If it’s only one person, you keep going.
Little red riding hood walked along the dirt path and thought to herself “I’m getting hungry”. She had walked a looooonng way but the thought of warm apple pie when she got to grandma’s house kept her going.


MY GROUP’S EXAMPLE.
One beautiful and sunny day three bff’s were going to adventure park at Leon’s house.
 Railey asked “what should food should we get?”
Leon replied “We should get 3 boxes of pizza, 3 boxes of popcorn and 3 shape boxes also a lot of soda”

Fereti said “That will be a great idea Leon we will have the greatest adventure ever created from human kind!”

Axel Blevin|Study Sheet story

There was man named Axel Blevins  he wanted to make his dream come true by jumping of the tallest waterfall.

Me and my friends took a minivan there.We had to make a pot stop to food and gas when we got there we had to do a barbarcar to cook.Some of us went into the sea and had a swim.

After the long swim they went to hunt some animals to have something to eat for their lunch. Also they went and got some water for the lunch.Later on me and john went looking for the water when we found it we told the rest of the crew to first we munch than we go.After we munched we went to the waterfall and jumped off after that we went home

Bean Boozled

Recount checklist ✓✓✓✓✓✓✓✓✓
Surface features	Searched	Found	Fixed
Capital letters at the beginning of a sentence	✓	✓	✓
Capital ‘I’	✓
Capital letters for names of places and people	✓	✓	✓
Full stops at the end of a sentence	✓	✓	✓
Speech marks when people are talking	✓
Punctuation - ? ! ; : ‘	✓	✓
Words are written in past tense	✓
Connectives - next, then, afterwards	✓	✓
Interesting and difficult adjectives	✓
Deep features
Introduction has who, what, when, where, why, and how	✓	✓
Conclusion has a reflective statement or says how you felt	✓	✓
Ideas/events in the right order	✓	✓
3 paragraphs	✓	✓
Metaphors and similes	✓	✓
Different types of sentences - short, long, compound and complex	✓	✓

Bean Boozled challenge!!!

On thursday 12th of April we were doing the bean boozled challenge.  At tamaki primary school in room 7 Ms.Ashley was given a bean boozled from Ms.Komor for christmas last year and she wanted to she it with her class room 7.

So she brought her bean boozled to class in room 7.

When we were ready she told us the flavors but when she also lifted the cap then it smelt like coconut for me but not for my friend Railey.

When the first volunteer Keru had got grass he said “YUCKY!!!” Then the next volunteer was Lopi and he got spoiled milk his heart was beating  after Lopi it was Michael’s turn when it was his turn he was so nervous but got a lime looking grass bean boozled like Keru.

So after 20 more people it was me and Railey’s turn I got licorice but I said this is nice but Railey got spoiled milk but he said “THIS IS SO YUCK” .

So we had a break from eating the bean boozled but all of us said “NO!!!” We don't want to stop.

So we did a round 2

Lopi and keru went and keru got boogers, lopi got grass

Tipene smells like licorice, michael got barf

Fereti has popcorn, dwyane got tutti frutti

Vina licorice, hiria pear.. But really lawn

Maria caramel corn, maani got tutti frutti.

Timote got lawn, but Kordell got popcorn

Team of 4

Hope got coconut, waiari got barf, Ana got dog food, lily has gotin tutti frutti

Team of 4

Railey spoiled milk, Paula - ???

Havea - got boogers

Leon got grass

Reign - got licorice

Davlyn - got caramel popcorn

Another one about the commonwealth games

Doing some more writitng

Crossing the bridge

On Saturday the 16th of March 1852, there was a farmer and her brown and white cow. The farmer’s name was called Peaches.

First the farmer Peaches got her cow and Struggled to move her heavy cow.  “ come on Bessie.” She said as she was struggling to pull Bessie. Peaches grabbed her coins and she went to William Johnson the toll keeper. She gave William Johnson 1 coin for her and 1 for her cow.

“Evening Johnson” she said as she was waiting to cross the bridge.

William Johnson took the money and said “Thank you very much,enjoy your day.” William Johnson used his strength to turn the winch so that the farmer could go through the bridge and go to the market. The farmer and the cow got to the market and the farmer got the bucket and milked the cow to sell the milk to the villagers.

The farmer looked and looked to see if anyone was coming to get some milk. But then she saw one person in line to see if it tasted nice. So she gave the nice lady some milk and she said “ WOOPHE!!!, That's the best milk i've ever tasted.” So she bought some milk and took it to her kids and they shared the milk together. After she left she told everyone about the milk and there was a whole line of people waiting to get some milk. Then he got to the last person and there was no one else in the line. So she packed up all her stuff and took her cow home.

Then they got home and they jumped straight on to their beds and went to sleep.

Recount checklist ✓✓✓✓✓✓✓✓✓
Surface features	Searched	Found	Fixed
Capital letters at the beginning of a sentence	✓	✓	✓
Capital ‘I’	✓	Did not found it
Capital letters for names of places and people	✓	✓	✓
Full stops at the end of a sentence	✓	✓
Speech marks when people are talking	✓	✓
Punctuation - ? ! ; : ‘	✓	✓
Words are written in past tense	✓	X	X
Connectives - next, then, afterwards	✓	✓
Interesting and difficult adjectives	✓	✓	Only winch. Need more.
Deep features
Introduction has who, what, when, where, why, and how	✓	✓	Where, why, how
Conclusion has a reflective statement or says how you felt	✓	Not there
Ideas/events in the right order	✓	✓
3 paragraphs	✓	✓
Metaphors and similes	✓	✓
Different types of sentences - short, long, compound and complex	✓	✓